- 14/10/2025
- Beppe Fino
- I enjoyed writing this piece because I liked imagining all the children painting the mural together. I think I described the garden mural well, especially when it turned beautiful at the end.
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What you did well:
Clear idea: You explained the process of painting the mural and how it became a memory for the school.
Nice ending: “Till now, the painting is still on that wall” gives a sense of lasting importance.
Good effort with descriptive words: Words like “beautiful garden” make the mural sound interesting. - Сарадња
- Поштује правила у заједничком раду и улоге у групи
Име беџа: Мајсторство тимског рада Беџ
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What can be improved:
Spelling and Grammar
Sentence Structure: Some sentences are too long. Use commas or break them into shorter sentences for clarity.
Add more details: What colors were used? How did the children feel while painting? Adding these details will make the story more vivid.