- 14/10/2025
- Sophie Grima
- I enjoyed writing this story because I liked making it exciting, especially the part where Timmy presses the mysterious button. I think I did well describing Uncle Vic’s house and the study because I wanted the reader to imagine it clearly. Next time, I want to add even more details about the robot and what happens after Uncle Vic comes in. I’m proud of my ending because it makes people want to read the next part!
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What you did well:
Great suspense: The ending with “TO BE CONTINUED” makes the reader want to know what happens next.
Imaginative details: Describing the old house with vines and the study full of books creates a vivid picture.
Good use of dialogue and action: “They said their hellos” and “Timmy pushed the button” make the story lively. - Креативност
- Користи на одговарајући и креативни начин језик и стил
Име беџа: Архитекта речи Беџ 
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What can be improved:
Spelling and Grammar: Watch out for words like “suprised” (should be “surprised”), “wen” (should be “when”), and “housers” (should be “houses”).
Sentence Structure: Some sentences are too short or repetitive. Combine ideas for smoother flow. For example:
Original: “There was also a small rusty gate. They walked inside.”
Improved: “Beyond the small rusty gate, they walked inside the house.”
Add more description: What did the robot look like? Was it scary, shiny, or broken? Adding these details will make the story even more exciting.
Финансиран од стране Европске уније. Међутим, изнети ставови припадају само аутору (ауторима) и не одражавају нужно ставове Европске уније или Европске извршне агенције за образовање и културу (EACEA). Ни Европска унија, ни EACEA не могу да носе за њих одговорност.